Thursday, March 28, 2019
The Haunted scary night out
I was describing on my picture on Pubille I worked so hard that i finally finished it it was based on Harry Potter the main charter is Slytherin`s Teacher.
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Hi Ngarangi, it's Antonette from Room 6! I liked the way you used describing words such as 'Shivering' in your writing, it hooked me in! Your idea was also interesting, how did you get the idea to write about Slytherin's Teacher? Maybe next time you can add names in your story like instead of using 'teacher' you can use their name so that your readers know what their name is. Other than that you have worked very hard for your writing Ngarangi! I can't wait to see more of your creative ideas!
ReplyDeleteHey Ngarangi, I'm Angie (I transferred to St. Bernadette's this year), I go to Room 6. Anyways, I like how you put a picture in to give as a picture of what you're writing about in our heads. Maybe next time select the words carefully, like what you wrote in the sentence "It might of been an evil deer but I didn't saw", check if words should be in past or present tense; "saw" should've been "see". Other than that, keep up the great work!
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